Aleksandr Pushkin - Angel ; Aleksandr Blok ;Vladimir Mayakovsky - Could You?

[Ayris Black]

so yeah, well
i'm a russian student, my hobbie is to translate something from time to time
and my teacher mr. Vladimir Shatsev has suggested me to post here and see
what people would say
i'm looking for opinions and criticism
thanks in advance. especially to those of you who would not refuse to spend
a little time giving me some feedback

alright, here goes Pushkin:

                                   <1827>
             Angel

At Eden's doors, the gentle angel
Was beaming with her head that's drooped,
And gloomy demon - rebel
Was flying over barathrum.

The spirit of denial and the dubiety esprit
Was gazing at the spirit chaste,
Cognizing dimly tender heat,
The one he's never felt.

«Forgive me; seen thee - he has spoken
- Your beam on me, it wasn't loss:
For I did not detest all over Heaven,
For I did not despise all over world.»

Blok:

Herein, in dusk at winter's ending,
Her and I - only twain souls.
«We shall see, if you're staying,
into the reeds the crescent's fall».
But in airy whiz of reeds,
The swooping breeze upon,
The limpid livid ice along
Her soul had coated with.
She's gone - and no more other soul,
The reeds, the crescent are the rest -
Tra-la-la-la: my purring go...
- And almonds' bitter taste.

and (well, no one in the world had yet translated anything from him, so yeah...)
Mayakovsky:
                                               1913

     Could you?

By dashing paint on ferial map
i'd smeared it at a blow.
the ocean's skew cheek on the cap
with galantine I showed.
I'd read the tin fish's scale upon
the lips' calls of the new;
Could you
play the nocturne
on the rainwater pipes flute?

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