R: [gothic-l] Gen. 2

[Giuseppe Pagliarulo]

Hails!

Good job, Matthaiu. My suggestions:


<<1 jah fullatojai wesun himins jah airþa jah alls fairhvus seins.>>
I'd prefer ize instead of seins. As far as I know, seins (reflexive
possessive) should never appear as a nominative. You may compare gen
2:1 in the Vulgate, where the corresponding Latin reflexive _suus_ is
also avoided.

<<2 jah fullatawida guþ saihstin daga waurstwa seina þoei gatawida,
jah
gahveilaida sibundan dag af allaim waurstwam seinaim þoei gatawida.>>
Why not sibundin daga?

<<4 þos bokos ussateinais himinis jah airþai sind þan waurþun, in daga
þammei
gaskop guþ himin jah airþa>>
þos silbons bokos?
You translate genesis (in the title) by "gaskapjains", so why not
bokos gaskapjainais?
himinis jah airþos :)
I don't think the sind is necessary.
in daga þan?

<<5 jah alla þo gronja akris faurþizei waurþeina ana airþai jah alla
þo kaurna
akris faurþizei keinodedeina ni unte rignida guþ ana airþa jah manne
ainshun
ni was waurkjan airþa.>>
unte > auk?

<<7 jah gadaig guþ mannan af muldai airþai jah inbaibles in andwairþi
is eþm
libainis jah warþ manna du saiwalai libandai.>>
libandai > libandein

<<9 jah ustauh guþ nauhþan af airþai allata triw skauni du siunai jah
goþ du
mateinai jah þata triw libainis in midjamma wagga jah þata triw
witainais
goþ jah ubil.>>
goþ jah ubil > godis jah ubilis?

<<17 ak af þamma triwa witainais goþ jah ubil ni matjais af imma iþ
þamma daga
matjais af imma dauþau gadauþnis.>>
ak af þamma... > iþ af þamma... The preceding clause isn't negative.
iþ þamma daga... > ak þamma daga...
þamma daga > þamma daga ei?


<<18 jah qaþ frauja guþ: nist goþ wisan mannan ainana; gaskapaima du
imma
hilpandan bi imma.>>
gaskapjaima

<<19 jah gadaig guþ nauhþan af airþai alla diuza akris jah allans
fuglans
luftaus jah attauh ija du þamma adam du gasaihvan hva haiti ija jah
all
þishvah þei haihait silbs adam saiwala libanda, þata was namo is.>>
silba adam (always weak).

<<21 jah insatida guþ usfilmein ana adam jah saislep jah nam aina
ribje
is jah
aftra-usfulljoda leik in stada þizos.>>
aftra-usfullida


<<23 jah qaþ adam: þatah nu bainos af bainam meinaim sind jah leiks af
leika
meinamma; si haitada mawi [weif, qens] unte us magau [manna, gumin]
þizos
numana ist so.>>
I'd suggest qino and wair.

Iosef Strawarila
  ________________________________________
                               Iþ gamain mis ist,
  hvaþro afleiþau; jainaþ auk aftra qima. (Parmainides)




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